With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered and some are even facing extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What can be done to deal with this problem

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Deforestation, urban

development

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and illegal hunting are the arguably most significant risk factors for wiping out some animal

species

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and

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endanger a lot. To keep wide biodiversity, a good global ecosystem and

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food chain, we must act. I think it is important to protect

animals

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, which can be done in different ways. In

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essay,

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will discuss those ways to deal with

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problem. Deforestation can be man-made or natural, in both ways

forest

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animals

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are losing their habitat. People can adopt

animals

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to support their living

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that can be done only for unharmful

animals

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. Animal shelters can be opened to provide shelter for the

animals

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that are endangered.

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forest

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fire in Australia, people adopted a lot of koalas so that the

species

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could be saved. Apart from that many other

species

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were saved and kept in animal shelters. Urban

development

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shrinks

forest

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areas because of cutting

forest

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trees and expanding the city areas. Tree plantation can be a good step to combat

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problem as more plantation than cutting can save

forests

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from being barren fields. In order to save

forests

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Forest

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reservations and urban

development

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authorities

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should work together to create a balance between urban

development

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and the deforestation process.

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; Bangladesh started planting trees and

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made legislation against cutting trees to save

forests

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, and saving

forests

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saves its

species

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. Illegal hunting has never stopped despite of relentless try of

forest

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authorities

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and animal reservation

authorities

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of all countries. Because of their failure,

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deerskin

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, elephant horn, cheetah skin, and wild cow hoof are still found in the black market. Law enforcing authority can be more vigilant on

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matter. In conclusion, rescuing an animal is easy but rescuing an entire

species

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needs contribution from different

authorities

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Your essay addresses the task only partially. It is important to fully explore all parts of the prompt, including the importance of protecting animals and detailed measures to address the problem. To improve, ensure that your essay comprehensively responds to the question by elaborating on why it is important to protect animals and by providing more specific solutions to the problem with clear explanations of how these solutions can be effective.

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Sentence 3 - Thesis
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Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

299 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

deforestation
urban development
illegal hunting
endangered species
extinction
ecological balance
ecosystems
pollination
seed dispersal
population control
biodiversity
resilience
intrinsic value
economic benefits
tourism
agriculture
legislation
wildlife protection laws
illegal hunting
wildlife reserves
marine protected areas
public awareness
conservation
community involvement
sustainable practices
scientific research
conservation strategies

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With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered and some are even facing extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What can be done to deal with this problem

Fully explain your ideas

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In this technological era, personal information is stored on computers by many companies and organisations. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?