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There is little control over the design and construction of new homes and office buildings, and people can build in whatever style they like. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Currently, in some countries are not regulated
this
 homes design and
construction
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construction, therefore
therefore
, many different styles of buildings are built. Undoubtedly,
such
 houses contribute to
varie
of many different kinds purposefully arranged but lacking any uniformity
various
varied
very
 merits and demerits.
However it
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However, it
 is my view that the importance of stylish buildings is very great. The following essay will discuss both views and present my opinion with appropriate reasons. On the one hand the ability of the design paved the way for great action
.
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.
Firstly
, the city full of beauty contributes to the growth of economic opportunities from tourism. Increasing stylish and inquire building in the country does not ignore foreign states.
Secondly
, similar
markets offices
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markets, offices
 and cafe directly associated with that construction appearance. If
such
 places are all
indentical
exactly alike; incapable of being perceived as different
identical
, visitors would find it boring to visit.
On the other hand
, houses built voluntarily are so negative that they poses some drawbacks.
First
 of all, building may not attain the safety standard. Due to natural disasters as
earthquake
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an earthquake
the earthquake
earthquakes
 and storm in some countries occurs often. From that a lot of houses
are not withstand
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do not withstand
.
Besides
, some people forget humility, when their money increases,
then
 they will get used to showing off wealth. It is my belief that
build
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builds
 in whatever style is very great. In the present stylish constructions are play huge role for rising of
country economy
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the country's economy
country's economy
a country's economy
. If build subject to safety precaution
,
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,
 behind that can achieve large plans. In
conclusion the metter
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conclusion to the matter
conclusion the matter
conclusion the matters
 discussed above is really disputable.
Nevertheles
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Nevertheless
, the significance of less control over the design and construction of new buildings.

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