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The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The over consumption of fossil
fuel
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 has become as a major topic of concern recently. Some people suggest that increasing the
fuel
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 rate can be the solution to cope with the environmental issues. Personally, I believe that other measures should
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 be given equal consideration.
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, increasing the
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 expense cannot minimise the global dependence on
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. It should be
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 noted that even when the bill of
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 increases significantly, people still cannot cut down the tremendous demand for petrol at once.
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, in daily life people still need to use their cars despite the fluctuation in petrol price. Another clear reason is that petrol is
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 intended for other applications in manufacturing industries and agricultural purposes. If the price of
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 increases, the national economy could suffer many unfavourable consequences. When it comes to reducing the greenhouse gas emissions, some measures should be taken to mitigate the problems of over consuming gas. The most practical measure of the moment is to reduce the demand for resources in daily activities like travelling or production.
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 can be done by encouraging people to turn to mass-producing energy-efficient products like hybrid cars or implementing new energy saving technology in the manufacture.
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, the most sustainable solution is to lower the reliance on
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 by taking advantage of alternative resources. Wind and tidal power in the Netherlands, nuclear power in Japan and solar power in the United States have all proven their efficiency in energy in energy production. These could be employed in other parts of the world to minimise the global dependence on fossil
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. As all existing data above shows that the only cutting down the
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 cost will not reduce the global warming effects. Some strong alternative measures need to be implemented to tackle
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 situation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • disproportionately affect
  • renewable sources
  • solar energy
  • equity in environmental policies
  • exacerbating social inequalities
  • incentivizing
  • subsidies
  • strict regulations
  • industrial emissions
  • sustainable local production
  • carbon footprints
  • punitive measures
  • sustainability efforts
  • robust and lasting changes
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