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Internet contains a lot of information, however, sometimes this information is inaccurate or wrong. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In
this
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 present era, our major source of knowledge is the
internet
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.
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, it is thought by many people that the web contains wrongful
information
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. I disagree with
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 notion as the
Internet
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 gives up-to-date and powerful
information
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 so, I would like to give reasons in upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, the first and foremost reason is the verification of the
content
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. By
this
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, I mean that nowadays various amounts of data are available on trustworthy websites like Google Chrome and Wikipedia.
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, if an individual searches about medical-related conditions
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 as cold or any common conditions
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 there are many sources available with proper signs and symptoms. All
this
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information
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 is verified by the Google search engine.
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, there is a feature on the web for customer feedback related to the
content
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 on the website, in case of any issue, ergo hardly is a chance of rumours or misleading
information
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 on the
internet
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. To hit the nail harder, owing to the involvement of stringent policies of some web platforms like YouTube or Instagram, people or
content
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 creators who any false videos and try to spread wrong facts in society, they all
content
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 creators have to suffer legally
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the public
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 their videos are removed by the higher authority of the particular platforms.
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 but not least, it is even believed that the education system, news platforms, and communication modes, all will solely be done via the medium of the
internet
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. It is possible
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 high-security and trustable online domains.
To conclude
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, advanced technology has a durable source of
information
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 by public count. There is very little chance of false guidance
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 it will automatically removed by legal authorities.
Therefore
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, I disagree with the given thought.

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coherence cohesion
Your response is well-organized overall, but there are areas that need improvement. Consider using various linking words and phrases to help the essay flow more smoothly. Additionally, ensure each paragraph develops a single idea clearly to maintain coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
While you have provided a complete response to the task, some of the ideas are not comprehensively clear. Aim to further elaborate and clarify your points, providing more in-depth explanations and examples where relevant.
task achievement
Provide more relevant and specific examples to support your arguments. This will strengthen your essay and make your points more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction clearly states your view on the topic, and your conclusion succinctly wraps up your argument, which helps in making your essay coherent.
task achievement
You have correctly identified key points such as verification of content and policies of web platforms, which are relevant to supporting your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • cybersecurity
  • phishing
  • identity theft
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • social isolation
  • internet addiction
  • data privacy
  • digital literacy
  • regulations
  • awareness programs
  • manipulate
  • proliferation
  • consent
  • escalated
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