The older generations tend to have very traditional idea about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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Nowadays, the
lifestyle
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between elderly people and young generations has some disparities and has been receiving a great deal of public attention.
Although
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following the conventional views seems feasible, changing the way of life in modern social should be implemented. There are a variety of reasons why the new
lifestyle
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can benefit for individual and
society
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as a whole.
First
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, since the joint family type has not existed in modern life, teenagers have a chance to live independently until they are eighteen years old. In fact, if teenagers are
bond
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bonded
with joint family, they not only will have
few
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little
private
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space, but
also
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get
losed their
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lost, their
lost their
independent characteristic that plays an important role for success in current
society
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.
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, the
citizens’expectancy
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will be increased if superstition has abolished.
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means that in the past, whenever the residents have health problems
such
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as fever,
stomache
an enlarged and muscular saclike organ of the alimentary canal; the principal organ of digestion
stomach
, they usually visit many
fortune-tellers
a person who foretells your personal future
fortunetellers
fortunetellers'
fortuneteller's
or drink medicine that has not examined by doctors, compared to current life, patients of all ages always go to the hospitals or clinics in order to diagnose their illness in
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an
earliest
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earlier
way, which enables them to receive
best
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better
treatment methods and their health will be longer
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.
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, the conventional views have directly affected to the marriage.
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, since the role of husbands and wives
such
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as breadwinners and housewives existed, it caused inequality among two genders. In fact, if modern
lifestyle
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has been applied, the intelligent women will have a
chane
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
chance
change
to become professional experts or even leaders, which leads to
development
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the development
of a country in every
fields
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field
, especially economic and financial aspects.
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, in order to decline the rate of
broken marriage
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broken marriages
a broken marriage
, the government should implement some ways to reform traditional opinions.
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means that in current
society
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, if each
citizens
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citizen
have rights to make own decisions on choosing their mate, the family members will live more durable, especially in the relationship among husbands and wives
instead
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of suicides caused by unhappy marriage.
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, adolescents should consider carefully to choose a suitable
lifestyle
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themselves. By applying the new trends, the
society
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will be developed significantly. 300 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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