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The graph below gives information about annual rainfall in Brazilia between 2001 and 2011

The graph below gives information about annual rainfall in Brazilia between 2001 and 2011
#information #rainfall #brazilia
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The given line graph illustrates
the
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information about how annual
rainfall
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 fluctuated in
Brazilia
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 over a period of 10 years between 2001 and 2011. In the beginning, the figure stood at about over 700mm, before experiencing a decrease of approximately 500mm in 2002.
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 grew gradually over the
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3 years
 to reach about 850mm.
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 upward trend
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 noticeably. After a slight increase, it dropped again in 2008 to the same level as it was in 2006. In 2010, it reached its peak of about a bit less than 1000mm of
rainfall
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. But,
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 there was a marked decline back to
2001
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 year levels as figures nearly doubled.
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 in
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 remained relatively unchanged in the end, despite violent fluctuations throughout the period.
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, it was at its highest in 2010
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 the weakest figure could be observed in 2002

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rainfall, mm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual rainfall
  • millimeters
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • anomaly
  • climatic event
  • precipitation
  • hydrological cycle
  • evaporation
  • condensation
  • meteorological data
  • arid
  • humid
  • drought
  • flood
  • sustainable water management
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