Wealth and material belongings often measure the success that a person has. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What make a successful person?

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It is often believed by many that the wealthy and the other materialistic things that a person owns in his life are the best ways of measuring his success.

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, I believe that the financial stability is not the key criteria to measure an individual’s achievement. A perfect blend of a supportive family, a promising career and a sound health is what makes a successful human. Every person has his own ways of feeling contented. Though, rich and affluent people are thought of to be the most successful persons;

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, they may not have the same feeling about themselves.

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, a wealthy businessman, earning revenue of $2000 million, is perceived as a successful entrepreneur by many, whereas he still has not achieved his predetermined goals and

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, is not satisfied by his achievement.

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, different people set their own goals, no matter how big or small, according to their needs and desires; and meeting those targets with their sheer hard work and dedication is an accomplishment for them.

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, a feeling of contentment is the true measure of victory. The success of any human being is attributed by a number of other factors, apart from wealth.

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, a loving and a supporting family always motivate an individual to focus on his goals and give him a feeling of being complete.

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, having a dream job is another way of getting satisfaction in life.

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, these factors compounded with a sound health form an ideal combination of attaining accomplishment, as people who are having a healthy work-life balance, are happier than the rich individuals, who surely have money to buy anything in the worlds, but lack peace of mind. In conclusion, success has a different meaning for different individuals. While some relate being rich to being successful; I think a sense of accomplishment through contentment is the real measure of achievement.

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Wealth and material belongings often measure the success that a person has. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What make a successful person?

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