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Computers are becoming an essential part of education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages

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Computers have become an indispensable gadget in every life field, especially in education. Even though there are both positive and negative aspects to it based on the learning experience of the students and some using it for cheating purposes. In the following lines, both the positives and negatives of computers will be thoroughly discussed. One benefit of computers is to open a huge gate of information and access to a vast amount of resources, but the main advantage is the ability to provide audio-visual content to students. Students were limited to the books they had or on library and they were not able to observe or watch any scientific process included in the books.
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, tutors used to describe the solar system by drawing it, and it is
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 every student to visualize and imagine whole details about
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the Sun
, Earth and other planets, but by using computers they are able to examine all specific details and have
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a deeper understanding
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 of that system.
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, there could be a downside of using computers in education
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 as cheating or copying the contents completely from the web.
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 means, students can directly search the topics of their assignments
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 the web and copy everything and present it to their teachers to get better marks without even understanding the matter on their own.
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term, even
 if it helps them in the present.
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, learning only helps when a student is able to implement the concept in varied situations and problems. Without understanding and just copying, a student risks the inadequacy to implement
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 concepts. In conclusion, computers are like any other technological tool that could be used for significant educational experience, but at the same time it may lead to plagiarism.

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