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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that maintaining public libraries are no longer necessary in today’s world because the development of computer technology has allowed us to access a great deal of
information
 on the internet more efficiently. While I accept that there are clear benefits of online libraries over public libraries, I believe that it is still worth spending money on maintaining public libraries. There are two main advantages of online sources of
information
.
Firstly
, online sources can store a huge amount of
information
that is
 greater than any physical library.
This
 allows researchers to easily get the
information
 they need without having to travel to a local library.
Furthermore
, people can look for
information
 on the Internet whenever they want, while most libraries can only be visited during several hours per day.
This
 is
therefore
 particularly beneficial to those who have a hectic schedule and cannot visit these places during the operating hours.
However
, the preservation of local libraries is still necessary because of their distinguishing features which cannot be substituted by online sources. Libraries, in some countries, are still one of the most popular means of accessing
information
 among senior citizens, regardless of the availability of online
information
. In fact, most elderly people these days are technophobes and
therefore
 physical libraries are their preferred option.
Furthermore
, public libraries can be considered a more reliable source of
information
, compared with online sources. Indeed, there is an abundance of inaccurate and unreliable
information
 on the Internet, while libraries have proved to be a more reliable
information
 source, with the
information
 being carefully categorized by library staff members. In conclusion, despite the benefits of computer technology in providing
information
, in my opinion, there are good grounds for rejecting the view that spending money on maintaining public libraries is unnecessary.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • repositories of books
  • promoting literacy
  • community engagement
  • equal access to information
  • digital divide
  • accessibility issues
  • personalized assistance
  • educational programs
  • cultural events
  • safe spaces
  • community meetings
  • tactile experience
  • preserving historical documents
  • important cultural repositories
  • fostering a sense of community
  • communal hubs
  • serene and focused environment
  • conducive to study and reflection
  • irreplaceable value
  • distracted environment
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