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With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be oppened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree?

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Especially during the
last
 century, the quick growth in the use of
oil
 and gas as
energy
 resources, has leaded to a worldwide increase in these both. As a consequence, unexplored parts of the earth want to be researched in order to try to find out more
energy
 resources.
However
, in my opinion, I disagree with the idea of open up more zones just to find more sources of
energy
, as I believe it would mean a complete damage to the environment.
Firstly
, one of the main problems with doing
this
 type of research is the huge damage
that is
 produced to land around. Most of the
energy
 resources we know and we use in our daily lives,
such
 as fuel,
oil
 or gas, are dug out from the deepest parts of the earth's layers, so
in addition
, huge drills are made in the surface of the unexplored zones in order to extract them. Due to these aggressive procedures, the land surrounding the area is devastated and many of the plants, animals and any kind of living life that used to be there, disappears.
On the other hand
, not only the zone explored is destroyed, but
also
 the global environment is damaged. If more areas that have been never explored were started to be devastated, more
oil
 and gas would be taken out of them, and
as a result
, these would be used by even more people, which would mean more pollution. On the opposite, I believe that
instead
 of trying to find more
oil
 and gas, another kind of power source,
such
 as solar
energy
, should be used so
this
 environmental impact would be reduced. In conclusion, I think that the opening of more land to find and dig out more
oil
 and gas shouldn't be allowed and renewable energies should be the
next
oil
 and gas of the world.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global demand
  • finite resources
  • energy consumption
  • exploiting
  • untouched ecosystems
  • carbon emissions
  • climate change
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable energy solutions
  • geopolitical consequences
  • territorial disputes
  • dependency
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