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Some people think that when recruiting, companies should aim to take on people who are innovative and able to work independently while others consider they should recruit people who are able to work in a team and follow instructions. Discuss both the views and give your opinion

#people #companies #aim #work #team #instructions
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Firstly
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, Companies consists of manpower of different departments and positions. Even the Middle range companies will have a Human Resource department.
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Last few years
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The last few years
 HR became one of the crucial department in every
company
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.
For example
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, companies who has 50 to 60 employees,
In addition
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 to HR Manager they will have HR Assistants
also
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. Obviously, companies need to hire manpower because of various reasons
such
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 as the growth of the
company
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 and in case of Termination Or Resignation of the employees. When recruiting employees, starting from the Manager and above level "companies should aim to take on people who are innovative and able to work independently" just with the instruction given to them by the higher management because of the position in which they are sometimes, have to take decisions on
thespot
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the spot
. When recruiting employees below Manager level, if they can follow the instructions and carry on their duties successfully that will be enough for the
company
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. In fact, in both above cases team work is a must especially if it is a multinational
company
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 there will be lots of
communications
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communication
 within the country and branches outside country. To conclude, clearly it goes with for which position
company
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 is hiring to that particular employee.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innovative
  • independent
  • creative
  • problem-solving skills
  • development
  • new ideas
  • solutions
  • productivity
  • competitiveness
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • communication
  • consistency
  • adherence
  • policies
  • conflicts
  • efficiency
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