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Social media websites have amused large user bases. Do the advantages of being a part of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

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From my point of view the social sites have influenced many of
the large
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the larger
 products used in the
market
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The market
Market
, the positive point is that it helps in spreading the benefits; along with
THIS
 IT
also
 provides a platform to
bring new technology
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bring in new technology
. So
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would say that its advantages outweigh its disadvantages The importance of social media in
business
 is growing at warp speed
.
Accept space
.
the
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The
 reason behind choosing social networking is because there audience is hanging around
this
 popular
sites
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site
, and they are engaging with their favourite brands and connecting with them on
different level
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a different level
different levels
. By giving your
business
 a social touch you not only generate more
business
 but
also
 make your digital marketing much easier. They act as
doorway
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a doorway
 to your
business
 by showing your brands details in the search engine. Social sites
also
 have an ability to reach a large number of audiences, along with monitoring of the customer demands and problem they are facing, as customer satisfaction is the utmost priority.
Secondly
, social media allow many small companies to advertise for free, as these small companies cannot afford to showcase their products on radio, TV or banners due to limited funding.
For example
, anyone can create its own page on
face book
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Facebook
facebook
 and can reach
large audience
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a large audience
large audiences
 through
this
 medium,
hence
 promoting small companies
.
Accept space
.
while
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While
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 won’t deny that social sites have given a chance to post unnecessary photo, in spite of it has
also
 helped to bring out new technology. At the
end i
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end, I
end I
 would sum up that social media has intangible benefits along with a worthy platform for all
kind
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kinds
 of audience which you might not find anywhere else. So the company should use
this
 weapon wisely and get the best out of it.

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