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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#people #parents #children #members #society #school #place
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It is controversial issues that, growing number of people claim that it is pa
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the parent's responsibility
o guide their kids to be great citizens, while others believe school is the important place to educate good behaviour.
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, I believe that both must be influencing a major role in youngsters' habits. On the one hand, there are clear arguments that parents should teach children how to be good members. One of the main reasons for that parents are the
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 people and role models for all the children have seen
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 in their life,
this
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 means that kids spend most of the spare time with their parents and they are mostly interacting with them,
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, definitely, children will listen to their guidance as well as parents have lots of experience in their prior times which helps their child. To illustrate, from my personal experience parents ar
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 people thought me a good ma
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nd structure of the society. Which is so helpful to me when I grew up as an adult.
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, the rest of the people are arguing that schools are the place to learn to be good members of society. There are several reasons for that
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 of all, other than pa
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ids spend more time in school with teachers,
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, after certain age youngsters are schooling to gain knowledge while they are studying
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, schools are never missing to coach their students about habits and how to live with other human beings in a proper way.
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, In China, the government implements good be
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manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
rom their school learning syllabus to mould their young bloods. In conclusion, both of them have merits on balance,
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, I tend to believe that parents and institutions having a major role to produce decant civilians to
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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