IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socialising with others. Do you agree or disagree?

#television #free-time #people
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
People are becoming more humdrum and lacking in social activities due to plethora use of
television
Use synonyms
, as it engulfs their free
time
Use synonyms
. I agree with that scenario,
however
Linking Words
, there are few advantages we must oversee. Positive side of the
television
Use synonyms
 is, it bestows us exorbitant of knowledge.
Such
Linking Words
 as, it updates us to the world in the form of news where we can obtain the latest news as well as infotainment channels confer us with the latest technologies
then
Linking Words
 comedy and other daily soaps help us to be informed, updated, and entertained respectively, while seating in the couch.
As a result
Linking Words
, I feel these views always helpful to everyone. I reckon, even it renders few wonderful things to us
,
Accept space
,
but extra temptation may ruin our life.
For example
Linking Words
, after a hectic or challenging work we sit before the
television
Use synonyms
 and after some
time
Use synonyms
 we arrest ourself in front of it, while enjoying different channels. As a consequence, we unable to move from there and miss a lot of other essential activities. Named, doing exercise and reading books which keep us healthy and updated too.
Last
Linking Words
 but not least, we
also
Linking Words
 miss to meet our friends and neighbours who assist us in our up and downs. So, it is vital to keep the short block, to glance the
television
Use synonyms
. To recapitulate, with our above discussion, we can utilise your precious free
time
Use synonyms
 in many other things with controlled TV views. It is true that with excess watching we can waste our
time
Use synonyms
. To conquer the situation, we have to set the schedule which provides an abundance of our access
time
Use synonyms
 to do the additional things which boost our routine.
Submitted by rupsen.kompe on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: