Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

Freedom in releasing the
information
and
also
sharing
has been
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have been
beneficial as awareness is important these days. What do you think? Profits of sharing
information
such
as academic knowledge and scientific research results
persuade
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have persuaded
people to support
this
manner as reasonable attitude for helping others. Despite, some other believe different that some of that
information
probably are so important to share freely and would not be logical as they are valuable.
However
, I suppose that share the
information namely
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information, namely
, medical remedies
are
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is
helpful cause they are so vital for surviving the humankind.
Moreover
, some
information
not suitable for trading because of influencing on all population round the
world
. Nowadays, sharing the
information
is vital
such
as medicals. Because some newborn diseases have been emerged and
then
it is so important to how people can encounter them.
However
, there are countries that are
pioneer
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pioneers
pioneering
in medical research and
then
sharing the
information
of results would be helpful for all people across the
world
. To explain the priority of sharing
information
, I remember that five years ago, one of my friends, Kaveh, got a cancer.
Then
the doctors warned him to do a surgery immediately because it was a scarce type round the
world
. Eventually, he had to travel to
UK
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the UK
to do that. His doctor
had it
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had, it
would be possible to do the surgery in our country, but we have limited medical
information
about
this
newborn cancer. How many people afford to do remedy overseas? In contrary, there are people think that some
information
has been gained by
hardworking
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hard working
and not fair to release freely. Indeed, others have to pay for it and
this
is a fair
trading
Suggestion
trade
, these days. They assume that some
information
is so valuable and
also
in
top secret level
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the top secret level
and relevant to national treasure and
therefore
, it is so principle to prevent of leaking. As Kaveh, had stayed about six months in hospital and they never gave him his medical documents. He came back home and passed the cancer. He is so happy now that could afford the medical expenditures, but concern about many people whom cannot pay for it. Eventually, I know that appealing to some specific
information
needs hardworking and spending money, But in my opinion, humanity is the highest valuable issue particularly in medicals.
Therefore
, it is not fair to do trading of sharing medical
information
because it is directly relevant to the humankind surviving.
Moreover
, even though some
information
is valuable, it would be better to share vital
information
. I hope that sharing the vital
information
like medical become globalized law to help the
world
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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