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Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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According to some people technological innovations have made people more sociable;
however
, others disagree with that view. In my opinion modern
technology
 is making people more sociable but at the same
time
 it hinders the
face
 to
face
 interaction among people. I will explain my view in
this
 essay. On the one hand, it is an irrefutable fact that modern
technology
 has shrunk our big planet earth into a small global village. Now it is possible for a person to contact his kith and kin who are sitting on the other side of the planet with the use of the internet and mobile phones or laptops on a regular basis.
This
 frequent contact among family members and friends strengthens the bond.
Moreover
, with the advent of fast transport systems / services like metro trains, bullet trains and flights the distance and travel
time
 has minimised and it is now possible for people to visit their relatives living in other countries or states more frequently. Obviously,
technology
 has increased the interactions among people.
On the other hand
, sometimes, children and adults become so obsessed with
technology
 that they avoid in-person interaction with their relatives and friends. Children become so engrossed with new gadgets that they avoid spending
time
 with their parents and friends. What is more, with the advent of e-commerce and various other websites now people are able to buy commodities of daily need or pay their bills online and
this
 again has limited the actual interaction among people. To conclude, I reiterate that modern
technology
 has given people a platform to stay in touch with their loved
ones but
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ones, but
 at the same
time
 it has taken out
face
 to
face
 interactions from the equation.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online marketplaces
  • mobile payment options
  • personalized advertising
  • accessibility
  • compare prices
  • decision fatigue
  • impulse buying
  • financial imprudence
  • privacy and data security
  • transformed
  • streamlined
  • user-friendly
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