Successful sports professions can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is a widely acknowledged fact that
sport
is a multimillion dollar industry of the world. As we know, professional
athlets
a person trained to compete in sports
athletes
usually receive huger salaries than those of other important professions
such
as doctors, lawyers, teachers or social workers.
Such
an issue has sparked some controversies amongst the public about whether
such
high salaries are
jutified
having words so spaced that lines have straight even margins
justified
or not Both perspectives will be much discussed in
this
essay. On the one hand, there are some reasons why professional sportsmen usually deserve high earnings.
Firstly
,
sport
is often regarded as a professional career
thus
not only must athletes undergo (=suffer) rigorous (nghiêm khắc = hard, severe) training but
also
cope with
tremendous pressure
Suggestion
the tremendous pressure
in each competition.
Secondly
, due to the fact that they
inevtably
in such a manner as could not be otherwise
inevitably
get injured during training sessions, leading to their inability to compete with their rivals, they can easily suffer from depression or other mental issues. Another argument in
favor
promote over another
favour
of high salary for
sport
players put forward is that their achievements bring
honors
Suggestion
honour
honours
honest
and public recognitions not only for themselves but
also
for their team.
As a result
, some people believe that it is completely
jutified
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justified
to pay
sports professions
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sports, professions
higher salaries than other careers.
On the other hand
,
such financial privilege
Suggestion
such financial privileges
granted for top – notch (xuất sắc)
sport
players can somewhat be unjustified since numerous professions are
also
making
significant contribution
Suggestion
a significant contribution
to social development, but have not yet received the deserved income. There are occupations
such
as doctors whose responsibility is to save people’s lives; lawyers, who help ensure the implementation (sự
thi
definite article
the
hành = operation, practice) of justice or scientists that discover new inventions. Each career brings considerable benefits to human’s well being, and
hence
the world can be more developed and civilized.
Moreover
, science
programs both
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programs, both
reduce stress after a long working day and extend people’s knowledge about the world. In conclusion, we
can not
can not
cannot
deny that both sides are well – grounded.
However
, I side with the fair wage for
professions
a person engaged in one of the learned professions
professionals
in all fields and it is more advisable to consider the contributions of each occupation for determining the appropriate salary so as to achieve completely social
jutice
the quality of being just or fair
justice
.
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