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Some people believe that the only purpose of films is to entertain. Others say films should have educational value. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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films. While many people believe that movies should only be allocated to the entertaining goal, I would argue that it is essential for producers to combine a number of educational factors. On the one hand, there are some certain reasons why movies are only associated with entertainment. One of the reasons is that they have originally been created for that purpose. Everyone, including children and adults, m
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to watch films in order to mitigate the stress they encounter in their studying and working life.
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, should other elements are included in films, no one could realize them or even ignore them. Another reason is that the addition of other factors to a film could reduce its attraction to watchers. Numerous topics
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 as healthcare, education and politics, which often make front-page headlines, are considered to be inadequate to movies because of their lack of exciting items. As a consequence, there would be fewer people opting for films, resulting in some financial burden on teams of producing movies.
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, there should be a need of adding several educational features to m
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 paves the way for children to enhance their skills. To illustrate, movies containing tips and ways to efficiently study English and spoken in English enable children to improve their proficiency in that most common language in the world. In combination with visual elements of f
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 the process would become fascinating, helping them to maintain their motivation.
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, educational details in films provide people with a huge amount of cultural information.
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, they are more likely to broaden their horizons about various customs in the world, which empowers them to travel everywhere without hiring a tour guide. In conclusion, for the aforementioned reasons, I would affirm that the combination between education and relaxation in films are of benefit for viewers,
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 many people insist on the exclusiveness of soothing contents.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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