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Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this.

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Multinational companies are spreading worldwide as their businesses are flourishing. There are several benefits and drawbacks of
this
. I will explain them in
this
 essay with relevant examples. There is an increasing demand for big brands throughout the world,
firstly
, if someone is planning to buy any
product
 from these big brands, they might have to travel to their specific country to purchase it from their stores, so they will have to include travelling cost
as well as
 hotel stay in their budget,
however
, if these
products
 are readily available in their own country so,
this
 will save the cost of travelling and hotel booking.
Furthermore
, one will easily buy original
products
, directly from the store and the chances of selling fake
products
 will be reduced.
For instance
, I wanted to buy a Rado watch for my father, so I was planning to get it from Dubai,
however
, as their original store was opened in my city,
so
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I bought it from there, and
this
 saved my travel expenses and I got the real
product
 which I was looking for. The disadvantages of opening the branches in every country, somehow lower the value of the specific
products
, because the
product
 will lose its charm
,
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 if it is readily available. To illustrate, Nike (shoe brand) has opened
their
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several branches worldwide, and they have noticed a huge decline in their sales, as people lost their interest in Nike
products
, as they were readily available. Humans get attracted to the things which are rare and they feel happy and outclassed whenever they wear something which is unique.
To conclude
, opening multinational companies has numerous advantages for people, like saving travelling expenses and receiving the original
product
,
however
, one should not forget its disadvantages as well, which might have devastating effects on the businesses.
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Introduction
Your introduction effectively introduces the topic, but more explicit mention of the specific advantages and disadvantages could enhance clarity.
Conclusion
Ensure that the conclusion summarizes both sides of the argument instead of focusing mainly on advantages.
Task Response
Try to maintain a balanced tone in exploring both advantages and disadvantages.
Example
You provided a clear example with the Rado watch, which effectively illustrates one of your main points.
Conclusion
Your conclusion effectively wraps up the essay, reinforcing your main points.
Coherence
The logical flow between paragraphs is smooth and easy to follow.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Multinational corporations (MNCs)
  • Foreign direct investment (FDI)
  • Developing economies
  • Infrastructure development
  • Capacity building
  • Cultural diversity
  • Sustainability
  • Corporate social responsibility (CSR)
  • Technological transfer
  • Economic disparity
  • Market saturation
  • Brain drain
  • Indigenous industries
  • Expatriate management
  • Trade imbalance
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