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Some school leavers travel or work for a period of time instead of going directly to the university. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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These days gap
year
 between school and university has been increasingly taking a grip in many countries.
However
, it has a lot of benefits
such
 as
work
experience
 and having knowledge about a new language and culture, it has to confront with negatives like losing interest and poor utilization of money. An argument in favour of taking a
year
 off than continuing tertiary education is it offers valuable
work
experience
. Many students do a part-time or full-time job in order to earn money so that they can persist their
further
 studies.
Consequently
, not only do
such
 initiatives give good
work
experience
, but
also
 added in their curriculum vitae. Knowing the new culture and language is another imperative aspect of travelling overseas. Most students generally prefer to travel abroad for a short period of time before entering into university as it provides them with a chance to interpret new tradition and language, which is undeniably fruitful in future career prospects by being bilingual aspirants. There are many drawbacks of having a
year
 off. The majority of youngsters have inclined to lose their interest since the significant purpose of the tertiary study is getting a well-paid job to satisfy their basic needs.
However
, accumulating funds while part-time job makes them able to fulfil their demands.
As a result
, they quit their studies.
Moreover
,
such
 funds make them enable them to use in bad activities
such
 as gambling, drinks and drugs.
For example
, a recent poll by the UK government reveals that 60% of total students who are independent got addicted to bad influences. In conclusion,
although
 students get indispensable
work
experience
 by taking a
year
 off between school and university education, it has
also
 dealt with losing interest and addiction to bad habits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • school leavers
  • real-world experience
  • independence
  • structured environment
  • financial benefits
  • academic momentum
  • gap year
  • rigors
  • sidetracked
  • social disconnect
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