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It is better to save money than to spend it. How far do you agree with this statement? Is saving more important than spending in today's world?

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With the world in
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 economic turmoil, many of us face difficult choices in managing our money. Personally, I feel that saving is preferable to high spending, and i
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, saving money is a sensible precaution in a world where the future is uncertain. It is possible,
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, that a person might meet unemployment, ill health or other crises at some point in life. It is essential to have some funds in reserve for these situations, and saving is for most people the only way to achieve
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believe that saving is itself a good discipline for people to develop, as it builds skills of planning and reaching targets. We can see
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 in the way that disciplined people build up quite large sums through small monthly contributions to savings plans. In many cases
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 meets important objectives in their lives, including large purchases
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 as cars or property.
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, we have to remember the reasons for the current economic problems be
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he world. The crisis was caused by excessive spending and insufficient saving - not just by individuals, but by corporations and even governments themselves. I feel that an emphasis on sensible saving should be a universal strategy now. I do appreciate that some people think differently, saying that it is better to live for the moment and spend
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. While some daily spending is essential, of course, I feel
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 is a potentially unwise viewpoint, especially considering recent global events. To conclude, I believe that saving is the wiser course, not just for financial but
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 for personal and political reasons. Sensible saving is an invaluable skill and a buffer against uncertainty.

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