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The chart below shows the annual pay (thousands of US dollars) for doctors and other workers in seven countries in 2004

The chart below shows the annual pay (thousands of US dollars) for doctors and other workers in seven countries in 2004
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The bar chart compares seven different nations in terms of yearly
salary
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 for their
doctors
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 and other
workers
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 in the
year
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 2004.
Overall
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, the annual earnings of
doctors
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 were higher than other
workers
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of
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from
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 all countries.
In addition
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, the United States paid the highest
the
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apply
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amount
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 of
dollars
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 for their
doctors
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 and
workers
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 compared to other countries. By 2004, US
doctors
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 earned 120 thousand
dollars
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 a
year
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, double that of
doctors
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 in Italy,
Czech
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the Czech
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 Republic and Germany. France and Switzerland paid the same annual wages for
doctors
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, at about 70000
dollars
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.
While
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 the yearly earnings of
doctors
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 in Finland were the lowest, at around 50000
dollars
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. In the same
year
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, concerning annual pay for other
workers
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, the US took the top position again at around 43 thousand
dollars
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, followed by Switzerland and France with approximately 40 and 35 thousand
dollars
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 respectively. Interestingly,
workers
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 in Italy,
Czech
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the Czech
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 Republic and Germany received the same amount of salary, at precise 20 000
dollars
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 per
year
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words doctors, workers, year, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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