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In many countries school have severe problems with students behavior. What do you think are the causes of this, what solution can you suggest.

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In many countries educational institutions are facing problems with student's attitude. The ill action of students during class hours leads to disturbance. And it is getting out of control for teachers to handle the situations now a days. These kind acts by students affecting not only their academics, but as well as the reputation of the institute. The main causes of
this
 problem can be many factors
such
 as lack of parental guidance at home, improper upbringing can be the reason for students who are lacking discipline in schools. Nowadays both parents tend to work and spend most of the time in office due to which their children not getting enough time, attention and care.
Furthermore
, surroundings can
also
 influence the ill performance in students. And that surrounding can be related to home and friend circle of an individual.
For instance
, a person
rise
Suggestion
arises
arise
 in a broken family and whose parents are not in good terms these kind of upbringing can affect one's character.
Similarly
, an individual spent most of the time with negative friends,
then
 there is a chance of an individual to turn like them. Another cause can be, technology
such
 as TVs, internet, cell phone so on, from these children could learn about fall languages, physical fight etc.
This
 problem can be improved by implementing personality development and counselling session in schools by the government. Guiding parents about the importance of proper bringing up from the early age of their children. Parents should be aware of the surroundings of their children. Keeping it under control can improve it. To conclude, it is the duty of guardians to realize the proper meaning of upbringing, so that in the near future their children will not grow up with ill and rude nature.
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