The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.

The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.
The bar chart shows
passengers
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the passengers
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number
who used three airports( JohnF.
Kennedy
, LaGuardia, and Newark)
of
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in
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New York City in the period of 5
years
from 1995 to 2000. In general, there was a fluctuant trend in the
number
of
passengers
who travelled via John F.
Kennedy
airport,
while
the other two airports saw an upward trend. In 1995, the
number
of
travelers
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travellers
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at Newark was 15
million
, which was 20
million
lower than that of
passengers
used
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who used
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LaGuardia. Both figures continue to increase gradually, but in 1998
passengers
at Newark remained stable for the
last
three
years
, with 41
million
. As can be seen from the chart, more
passengers
used LaGuardia airport in the year 2000 compared with other airports. It held the first rank in 2000, well under 70
million
. By 1995, the amounts of travellers
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who used
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used
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using
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John F.
Kennedy
airport received 27
million
. During the
next
2
years
,
passengers
at John F.
Kennedy
are by far
highest
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the highest
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number
of all
years
, it took a lead with 48
million
travelers
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travellers
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.
Then
, the
number
of
passengers
experienced a considerable drop, until 2000, it regained pace and increased,
at
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to
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42
million
travelers
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travellers
show examples
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words passengers, number, kennedy, years, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant increase
  • highest number
  • steady increase
  • largest growth
  • dramatic
  • slowest growth
  • slight decrease
  • gradual increase
  • period
  • travelers
  • major airports
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