Some people think that mental strength is the most important factor for success in sports. However, some others believe that it is more important to have strong and fit people. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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People

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Peoples

‘opinions differ as to either mental toughness or physical

fitness is

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fitness, is

the key element for sporting achievements. While there are many individuals who are

from a particular thing or place or position

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to the view that physical resilience is the uttermost importance,

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personally believe that strong mentality is

the more crucial

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the most crucial

factor. There are several reasons why muscular strength has been considered as an essential sports gear.

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, having stamina, flexibility and agility are all indispensable requirements for

sportpeoples

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due to the fact that it could help them to perform outstandingly in most of the competitions.

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of skills, sport

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weightlifting

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weight lifting

is drastically instrumental in building muscles as most of their victories depend on brute strength and stamina or

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, how well they perform in competitions is proportionate to how athletic they are.

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sportspeople

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who have bad mood could still be robust if they are forced to do physical

manoeuvers

a military training exercise

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while on the other hands, if people who play sports have

excelent

very good;of the highest quality

excellent

mentality

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mental

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of physical toughness, it is still hard for them to remain their positive mood owing to the fact that they could have lost one of the most compulsory

factor

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factors

for their career. In spite of those above arguments, I support the view that mental health has an imperative role to play in attaining sporting prowess. The main reason is that mental competition is

postulate

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postulated

in most of the tournaments. As the matter of fact, strong-willed players who could relieve intense pressure, train their mind to get rid of the fear of failure are those who achieve great success. Even seeded players could bitterly lose to underdogs if they are under pressured.

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, in the football match between Viet Nam and

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Thailand

Land in 2019, despite the physical fitness is not as good as the opposed team, Vietnamese footballers

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were

successful in attaining the

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place due to admirable skills and especially, the maintenance of concentration, the controlling of negative thoughts. To sum up, while there are numerous people who in favour of the opinion that physical toughness is

paramount factor

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a paramount factor

the paramount factor

for sporting achievements, I agree with those who believe that mental capacity is the vitally crucial.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Some people think that mental strength is the most important factor for success in sports. However, some others believe that it is more important to have strong and fit people. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Universities should take the same number of men and women in each major. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio- diversity. What are the primary causes of loss of biodiversity? What solutions can you suggest?

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