Some people think that mental strength is the most important factor for success in sports. However, some others believe that it is more important to have strong and fit people. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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People

Suggestion

Peoples

‘opinions differ as to either mental toughness or physical

fitness is

Accept comma addition

fitness, is

the key element for sporting achievements. While there are many individuals who are

from a particular thing or place or position

off

to the view that physical resilience is the uttermost importance,

refers to the speaker or writer

personally believe that strong mentality is

the more crucial

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the most crucial

factor. There are several reasons why muscular strength has been considered as an essential sports gear.

Firstly

, having stamina, flexibility and agility are all indispensable requirements for

sportpeoples

due to the fact that it could help them to perform outstandingly in most of the competitions.

Besides

of skills, sport

such

weightlifting

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weight lifting

is drastically instrumental in building muscles as most of their victories depend on brute strength and stamina or

in other words

, how well they perform in competitions is proportionate to how athletic they are.

Moreover

sportspeople

who have bad mood could still be robust if they are forced to do physical

manoeuvers

a military training exercise

manoeuvres

manoeuvre

while on the other hands, if people who play sports have

excelent

very good;of the highest quality

excellent

mentality

Suggestion

mental

instead

of physical toughness, it is still hard for them to remain their positive mood owing to the fact that they could have lost one of the most compulsory

factor

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factors

for their career. In spite of those above arguments, I support the view that mental health has an imperative role to play in attaining sporting prowess. The main reason is that mental competition is

postulate

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postulated

in most of the tournaments. As the matter of fact, strong-willed players who could relieve intense pressure, train their mind to get rid of the fear of failure are those who achieve great success. Even seeded players could bitterly lose to underdogs if they are under pressured.

For instance

, in the football match between Viet Nam and

Thai

Suggestion

Thailand

Land in 2019, despite the physical fitness is not as good as the opposed team, Vietnamese footballers

was

Suggestion

were

successful in attaining the

first

place due to admirable skills and especially, the maintenance of concentration, the controlling of negative thoughts. To sum up, while there are numerous people who in favour of the opinion that physical toughness is

paramount factor

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a paramount factor

the paramount factor

for sporting achievements, I agree with those who believe that mental capacity is the vitally crucial.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

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Relevant & specific examples

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Some people think that mental strength is the most important factor for success in sports. However, some others believe that it is more important to have strong and fit people. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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