Some people believe that university students should pay all the cost of studies because university education only benefit the students themselves not the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a controversial notion that students attending
university
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should pay tuition fees by themselves as it is only personal benefits.
Although
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I understand
this
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point of
veiw
a way of regarding situations or topics etc.
view
, I would argue that government should support
university
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students for
notional
of or relating to or belonging to a nation or country
national
growth.
Ademittedly
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Admittedly
, there are some disadvantages to supporting
university
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students.
To begin
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with, some people might insist that it is a burden to
investing
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invest
a government's
budgets
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budget
in encouraging many pupils to attend
high education institution
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a higher education institution
higher education institution
higher education institutions
.
This
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is because if the governments give many benefits to
unviversity
the body of faculty and students at a university
university
students, some people who do not need to go to the
unversity
the body of faculty and students at a university
university
universities
are likely to apply school for a only high status.
In addition
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,
this
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situation might lead them to losing their enough time to think what they want to be and to explore some adventures
for
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in
their future.
As a result
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,
this
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could have harmful effects on both individuals and society.
However
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, I still believe that supporting
university
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students can bring about many positive consequences. The increasing number of undergraduates is not only beneficial for
individuals but
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individuals, but
also
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for society.
For example
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, well-educated people improve their ability to compete with others in
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university
Suggestion
the university
universities
,
abtaining
come into possession of
obtaining
professional knowledge. Due to
a
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an
intense competitiveness, being graduated from
university
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has become
necessary facter
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a necessary factor
necessary factor
necessary factors
for employment.
Therefore
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, these
intellignet
having the capacity for thought and reason especially to a high degree
intelligent
people can cause a national development in many ways, helping companies winning in global competition. In conclusion, according to
aforementioned reasons
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the aforementioned reasons
, I understand some drawbacks of helping
university
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students financially, I still
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
that
this
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should be seen as a positive development for both individuals and society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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