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MamadjonovSamandar: The graph below shows four countries of residence pf overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information ba selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant

MamadjonovSamandar: The graph below shows four countries of residence pf overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information ba selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph provided demonstrates what the number of international students from
such
 4 chosen countries as
Indonesia
,
Hong
Kong
,
Malaysia
 and
Singapore
 was like in Australia over 18 years starting from 1982.Units are measured in 1000 students
Overall
, it can be seen from
figure
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the figure
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 that, the number of students
came
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who came
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 from 4 countries increased gradually between
giving
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the giving
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 period, but
Indonesia
 reached the pick after
Singapore
 in 2000
although
Malaysia
 demonstrated the highest rate at the beginning
while
 the number of people from
Hong
Kong
 and
Malaysia
 was almost the same at that time. One of the first things to note is that
Malaysia
 had rather more
student
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students
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 showing approximately 7 compared to
Indonesia
 and
Hong
Kong
 demonstrating almost 1.
Following
this
,
Malaysia
leveled
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levelled
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 out
next
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the next
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 decade demonstrating 9
while
Indonesia
,
Singapore
 and
Hong
Kong
 increased steadily in
this
 period showing almost 10 in 1994.
Finally
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Indonesia
,
Hong
Kong
,
Malaysia
,
Singapore
Correct word choice
and Singapore
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 fluctuated
next
 6 years and showed 21, 18 19,
17
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and 17
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 appropriated in 2000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next, while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words indonesia, hong, kong, malaysia, singapore with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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