MamadjonovSamandar: The graph below shows four countries of residence pf overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information ba selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph provided demonstrates what the number of international students from
such
4 chosen countries as Indonesia
, Hong
Kong
, Malaysia
and Singapore
was like in Australia over 18 years starting from 1982.Units are measured in 1000 students
Overall
, it can be seen from figure
that, the number of students Add an article
the figure
came
from 4 countries increased gradually between Correct pronoun usage
who came
giving
period, but Correct article usage
the giving
Indonesia
reached the pick after Singapore
in 2000 although
Malaysia
demonstrated the highest rate at the beginning while
the number of people from Hong
Kong
and Malaysia
was almost the same at that time.
One of the first things to note is that Malaysia
had rather more student
showing approximately 7 compared to Fix the agreement mistake
students
Indonesia
and Hong
Kong
demonstrating almost 1.Following
this
, Malaysia
leveled
out Change the spelling
levelled
next
decade demonstrating 9 Correct article usage
the next
while
Indonesia
, Singapore
and Hong
Kong
increased steadily in this
period showing almost 10 in 1994.Finally
Add a comma
,Finally
Indonesia
, Hong
Kong
, Malaysia
, Singapore
fluctuated Correct word choice
and Singapore
next
6 years and showed 21, 18 19, 17
appropriated in 2000.Correct word choice
and 17
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next, while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words indonesia, hong, kong, malaysia, singapore with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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