MamadjonovSamandar: The graph below shows four countries of residence pf overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information ba selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant

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The line graph provided demonstrates what the number of international students from

such

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4 chosen countries as

Indonesia

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Hong

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Kong

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Malaysia

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and

Singapore

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was like in Australia over 18 years starting from 1982.Units are measured in 1000 students

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, it can be seen from

figure

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the figure

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that, the number of students

came

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who came

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from 4 countries increased gradually between

giving

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the giving

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period, but

Indonesia

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reached the pick after

Singapore

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in 2000

although

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Malaysia

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demonstrated the highest rate at the beginning

while

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the number of people from

Hong

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Kong

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and

Malaysia

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was almost the same at that time. One of the first things to note is that

Malaysia

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had rather more

student

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students

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showing approximately 7 compared to

Indonesia

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and

Hong

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Kong

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demonstrating almost 1.

Following

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this

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Malaysia

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leveled

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levelled

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out

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the next

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decade demonstrating 9

while

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Indonesia

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Singapore

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and

Hong

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Kong

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increased steadily in

this

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period showing almost 10 in 1994.

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Finally

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Indonesia

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Hong

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Kong

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Malaysia

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Singapore

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and Singapore

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fluctuated

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6 years and showed 21, 18 19,

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and 17

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appropriated in 2000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next, while".

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: Replace the words indonesia, hong, kong, malaysia, singapore with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.

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8
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
5
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

162 words

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