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Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends. How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Global
fashion
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 has become an increasingly powerful force in shaping people’s lifestyles.
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 phenomenon can be attributed to the rise of digital platforms and international trade. I believe
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 development is largely positive, as it promotes cultural exchange and supports economic growth, though some concerns about cultural homogenisation remain. One major reason global
fashion
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 exerts
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 a strong influence is the prevalence of social media influencers. Platforms
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 as Instagram, TikTok and X expose millions of users to international
fashion
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 trends on a daily basis.
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, when a well-known model or vlogger showcases a vintage outfit online, the style can quickly become a viral trend, inspiring large numbers of followers to imitate it.
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,
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once
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, once
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 confined to specific
regions
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regions,
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 can now spread globally within days, reinforcing the impact of digital connectivity on consumer choices. Another factor is the integration of global markets and cultures. International trade allows clothing and accessories from one region to reach consumers worldwide.
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, traditional Thai jewellery is now exported to Europe and North America, enabling people across the globe to access unique products that were once locally confined.
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 critics argue that
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 trends may erode cultural diversity, in
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 they often encourage people to appreciate and preserve their own traditions
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 embracing foreign influences.
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 process highlights the two-way nature of cultural exchange. In conclusion, the dominance of global
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 is driven by social media exposure and international commerce.
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 there are concerns about the loss of local distinctiveness, the
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 impact is positive because it enhances cultural communication and contributes to global economic prosperity.

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task
Make your view clear in the intro and end with a simple statement that says if you think the topic is good or bad.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words. Use easy signs like first, next, also, but, for example to show how ideas go together.
language
Use plain words. Some long lines can be cut into two short sentences. Choose exact examples that fit the point.
strength
The view on why fashion is strong is clear.
content
Good choice of examples from social media and trade.
structure
The essay uses a clear order with 'one reason' and 'another factor'.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • global
  • fashion
  • clothes
  • dress
  • wear
  • look
  • style
  • brand
  • label
  • shop
  • price
  • money
  • media
  • ads
  • post
  • like
  • world
  • culture
  • express
  • expression
  • culture
  • work
  • jobs
  • earth
  • environment
  • press
  • pressure
  • spend
  • buy
  • design
  • trend
  • brand
  • celeb
  • celebrity
  • internet
  • online
  • shop
  • social
  • media
  • fashion
  • trend
  • idea
  • choice
  • fit
  • color
  • color
  • cloth
  • fabric
  • hand
  • care
  • harm
  • good
  • bad
  • benefit
  • loss
  • balance
  • relation
  • impact
  • effect
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