Some people say that modern innovation brings a lot more problems than benefits? Do you agree or disagree?

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Modern renovations are thought by some to have had many devastating effects on society, while others believe these inventions are

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, I believe that

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revolutions encourage individuals, I agree that they have had damaging outcomes

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local communities. With regard to individuals the impact of modernization has had advantages on each person.

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, it saves time to improve communication technology in trade with greater

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before the development of technology people had the chance to meet face-to-face.

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the flexibility in business with 24/7 online jobs; work from home has increased the accessibility of data, in the past, people worked only 9 to 10 hours a day for social work-life balance.

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, the invention of

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vaccines, which

saves people from life-threatening diseases like plague, smallpox, etc.

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it has hazardous risks in terms of allergic reactions.

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, the modernized era has had countless merits over some stumbling blocks.

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, the ramifications of modern transformation: the scope of employment; as can be seen as negative; online shopping,

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at a higher position than

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shared base transport disrupted the local taxi industry.

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, the other concern is the lack of security regarding Bank transactions,

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, email hacking is a common issue nowadays.

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, the sedentary lifestyle due to computer-based jobs, people are unable to perform physical exercise which leads to various health issues namely obesity, blood pressure, and vision problems.

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, these inventions

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increased environmental pollution; though the harmful emission of gases and chemical waste from Industries. The traffic congestion is a vital source of air

pollution which

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pollution, which

expands the death rates.

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, there are enormous obstacles that cannot be ignored, as it is catastrophic for society. In conclusion, even though modern revolutions have brought people to a certain height of success, they have not had the same effect on local communities.

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, I completely agree that the evolution of technology has major unwanted life-threatening outcomes;

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essay outlines the detrimental effects of modernism.

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