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In your view, what qualities does a city need in order to be a great place to live?

In order for a
city
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 to be inhabitable, I personally believe that it should provide its residents with recreational facilities, community
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
, and advanced and affordable
transportation
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 system. In
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 essay, I will elaborate on each of these points to have a better insight into the issue. A
city
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 with plenty of recreational facilities will ease the people’s lives who live there in several ways.
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, the availability of playgrounds or theme parks for children will contribute to their social and physical well-being in that they will have the chance to get
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socialized
 with their peers and
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 build better social skills starting from an earlier stage of their lives.
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, outdoor and indoor sports facilities are likely to provide adults with the opportunity to get rid of their everyday stress resulting from the hustle and bustle of modern
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. A wide spectrum of sports facilities may
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 help them build/maintain better health while making most of their free time in an effective way. Community
centers
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Centers
, in a similar fashion, are of great importance in that they can offer many educational and social events for its settlers living in the vicinity. These events may range from free lectures and talks on a wide range of topics by venerable pundits in society to
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skills, share
 opportunities as well as some social events
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 as live performances and monthly or yearly gatherings which will pave the way for somewhat strengthened communal ties.
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 but not least, an advanced and affordable
transportation
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 system will increase the quality of
life
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 to a considerable extent. Namely, maintenance of a fast, reliable, and safe public
transportation
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 in a
city
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 will bring a myriad of advantages from saving more time for activities to leading a healthier
life
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 into its residents’ lives. As for the accessibility issue, adjusting
transportation
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 fee based on the welfare of all residents from different strata of society and keeping them at a minimum level will
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 be equally important. The crux of the issue at
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 point is not only about the costs of travel within a
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city but
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city, but
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 the convenience of accessing all remote corners of a
city
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. To
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 end, the municipality should grant especially the elderly people and handicapped residents living in a specific
city
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 with effective transfer points. Considering all these qualities that a
city
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 should have, I strongly hold the opinion that it will be the best place to lead one’s
life
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. All in all, recreational sites, civic centres along with an inexpensive modern
transportation
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 system will make a
city
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 a great place to live, especially in today’s unprecedented circumstances.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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