The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may as many as 29 million vehicle on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduce to control car ownership and use. To what extant do you agree or disagree?

Undoubtedly there

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Undoubtedly, there

is

huge increment

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a huge increment

in

number

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the number

of cars in

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last couple

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the last couple

of

decade

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decades

, which certainly creates

problem

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problems

a problem

to

environment

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the environment

and society. I agree that

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laws should be

introduce

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introduced

to restrict the private

cars

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car

car's

ownership and public

transport

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facilities should be

improve

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improved

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Firstly Air

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Firstly, Air

pollution, which has become a huge problem for all, is mainly

increases

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increasing

increased

due to

transport

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emission. Several studies

shows

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show

have shown

that private cars

has

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have

major source

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a major source

of contribution

in

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to

air pollution.

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some developed countries have appreciated public

transport

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system which may attract people to use it

instead

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of personal

cars but

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cars, but

there is no stringent law to control the private

cars

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car

numbers.

That is

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why we have seen, younger generation still prefers to use personal vehicle

instead

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example children

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example, children

example child

example child child

want

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wants

to go

by

obtain by purchase; acquire by means of a financial transaction

buy

cars

instead

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of

school bus

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the school bus

to

showoff

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show off

their luxury.

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Use of personal

transport

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may lead people lazy, lack of physical exercise will lead to

health problem

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health problems

a health problem

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as obesity, high blood pressure and cardiac problems. It is proved that the person who walks average 5 Km daily will have less chances of heart attack. With

use

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the use

of

alternate form

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alternate forms

an alternate form

the alternate form

of

transport

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it will help to reduce the risk as well as saving of fossil fuels. With reduce number of private cars, the demand of petrol and diesel will

also

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reduce,

this

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will lead

to save

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to saving

non renewable resource of energy

for example

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petroleum and crude oil. In conclusion, The international laws to control the number of private

vehicle

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vehicles

will support society economically and

also

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support

clean environment

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a clean environment

. All countries should make

such

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laws that should be valid for all.