Some people think that money is the best gift for teenagers , others disagree. discuss both views and opinion.

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Firstly
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, nowadays teenagers have a different type of choices for gifts
such
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as digital games and electronic gadgets while older people may not have knowledge about it.
Therefore
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, teenagers may purchase traditional gifts which may not be liked by them.
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,
money
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is the best option for presenting to teenagers, so that they can buy their preferred things.
Secondly
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, when people give gifts they may not check all the features
such
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as material which
then
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may be useless to
receiver
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receive
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Instead they
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Instead, they
can give
money
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as a gift and
receiver
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the receiver
may buy after checking pros and cons of the product.
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, my aunt gifted to me a watch that did not have modern features and I was not happy.
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, gifts are reminders and whenever you look at present it remains you the person who gave it to you.But
money
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can not
can not
cannot
remain because you often forget cash presents.I remember my grandmother whenever I look at my
earings which
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ears, which
ears which
earrings which
earnings which
she gifted to me for my birthday. In summary
,
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,
according to me, even though people give
money
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as a gift to teenagers
instead
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of purchasing them a product which will generate the feeling of closeness and love.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial responsibility
  • budget
  • save
  • informed spending decisions
  • personal preferences
  • practical and efficient
  • unwanted or inappropriate gifts
  • impersonal
  • emotional value
  • thoughtfulness
  • personal consideration
  • wise financial decisions
  • frivolously
  • lasting memories and experiences
  • educational courses
  • hobby-related equipment
  • long-lasting positive impact
  • fostering interests and skills
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