There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heared everywhere nowadays?

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Nowadays,

music

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is play

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is playing

is played

important role in human

being

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being's

life. Because every human

being life filled with

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life being filled with

tensions. In that situation people wants to relaxation to their mind. So in that movement to

listen

perceive (sound) via the auditory sense

hear

any type of

music

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it gives relief to their minds. In that way

music

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need

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needed

for every human being. In the whole

world there

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world, there

are many different types of

music

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is there. In every

country

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has own traditional

music

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. It is more popular in own

country

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. It is more important than the international

music

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. Because in that

music

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people

heared

detected or perceived by the sense of hearing

heard

own traditional lyrics and traditional words. Traditional

music

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plays

important role

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an important role

in the

country

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. Because

music

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will connect quickly in whole

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country

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country, therefore

therefore

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, every human being shouldn't

forgot

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forget

his own traditional

music

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and his culture. But, nowadays in some situations international

music

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is dominating traditional and local

music

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. Because present days traditional

music

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is coming out and mix up with international

music

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. So, people's are attractive and addicted to that

music

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. Traditional

music

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fulley

to the greatest degree or extent; completely or entirely; ('full' in this sense is used as a combining form)

fully

effected with international

music

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For example

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this

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most famous western

music

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like pop

music

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. It is spread whole world. Most of the people in

world

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the world

listen

this

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pop

music

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and hooked to

this

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music

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. They forgot their traditional

music

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, in my

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country most

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country, most

of the people

first

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to prefer to

listening

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hear

listen

traditional

music

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Then

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after go for foreign

music

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. In my view

first

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I choose

listening

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to listen

to our traditional

music

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. Especially in that I like

melodious

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melodic

music

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a lot. No one can beat

this

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music

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because

that is

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the power of melodious

music

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. Most of the time I

listen

perceive (sound) via the auditory sense

hear

traditional

music

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only. But in some cases I listen western

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music especially

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music, especially

I listen lyrics. Because it helps to me to improve my

english

an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries

English

skills.

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Except

in that case rest of the time I

listen

perceive (sound) via the auditory sense

hear

traditional

music

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Conclusion

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The conclusion

any one

any person

anyone

can listen any type

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music but

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music, but

do not

forgot

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forget

your

traditonal

consisting of or derived from tradition

traditional

music

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. Because it is the mother of your

country

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music

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. And western

music

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also

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gives some

benifits

financial assistance in time of need

benefits

imporving

getting higher or more vigorous

improving

english

an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries

English

skills. But

first

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prefer traditional and

then

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after

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going

for western

music

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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356 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

emotional release
cultural significance
globalization
cultural exchange
technology
preservation
cultural heritage
social cohesion
expression
consumption
production
traditional music
international music
diversity
identity

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With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree?

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Some people say that the only way to get success is to go to university. Others say that it depends on other factors. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people suggest that the solution to this problem is to increase the price of fattening foods. To what extent do you agree or disagree?