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All over the world, the rich are becoming richer and the poor are becoming poorer. What problems does this cause? How can we overcome the problems of poverty?

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It is true that in all over the world, especially in poverty stricken society, the rich are becoming richer and the poor are becoming poorer.
This
 essay is going to examine the causes and solutions. On the one hand, an increasing difference in earnings of rich and underprivileged will lead the poor committing the crime,
such
 as snatching, kidnapping and murder.
This
 is because, everyone needs some income to make ends meet,
therefore
, in case a vast majority of citizens could not be able to afford necessities like food, there is a likelihood that they indulge themselves in unlawful activities to earn some money.
For example
, the New York Times reported that nations with a higher gap in incomes have a high crime rate, and most of the culprits belong to poor society. There are several steps can be taken by government to tackle the issue.
Firstly
, the tax law should be based on every member of public income. That means, more income pay more tax.
For instance
, the one who earns the minimum should be tax exempt.
Secondly
, the wealth should not be exceeded to a certain level. If it happens, it should be given authority to spend on public facilities and expansion.
Last
 but not least, the authorities should give fair job opportunities to people. A percentage of seats should be reserved in schools, colleges and work places for the poor people. In inclusion, many people owning more and more wealth, whereas the livelihood of the poor is declining day by day the world over.
This
 is a concerning situation because it can lead to an increasing number of crimes and the best way to curb
this
 problem is to raise the standards of the underprivileged society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Income inequality
  • Wealth gap
  • Socioeconomic disparities
  • Marginalized communities
  • Impoverished individuals
  • Privileged elite
  • Disparity in living standards
  • Social stratification
  • Exacerbate
  • Living below the poverty line
  • Income distribution
  • Lack of access to basic necessities
  • Food insecurity
  • Limited healthcare services
  • Education barriers
  • Socioeconomic mobility
  • Resentment
  • Economic disparities
  • Resource allocation
  • Underprivileged
  • Vulnerable populations
  • Cyclical nature of poverty
  • Government intervention
  • Multilateral cooperation
  • Empowerment
  • Progressive taxation
  • Equal opportunities
  • Social safety nets
  • Unemployment rate
  • Corruption
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