“Parents of obese children should be punished for making them fat. Do you agree or disagree?”

It is argued that parents of children

who overweighed

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who, overweight

who overweight

should take responsibility and be penalized for their role in making their kids become obese.

This

essay strongly disagrees with the statement because it is impossible for parents to constantly monitor what their children are eating every time,

also

, genes play a crucial role in making kids obese.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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“Parents of obese children should be punished for making them fat. Do you agree or disagree?”

Include an introduction and conclusion

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance learning from the Internet rather than teachers in the classroom. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Children should go school or be taught at home. Discuss both aspects and give your opinion.

The process gives information about how carbonated water is made.

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have a little effect on public health, and that other measures are required. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.