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Many people in poor countries die from diseases that are curable because they cannot afford the medication required. Do you believe that drug companies should make their products available at reduced prices in these countries?

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The high cost of modern pharmaceuticals means
people
 in poorer
countries
 are unable to benefit from them. I would argue that drug
companies
 have a moral obligation to make their products available to these
people
 and that there are other agencies that can help. Over the
last
 few
decades
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 there has been a dramatic improvement in medicine that has radically changed the treatment of many
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life threatening
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 diseases. While drug
companies
 profit from treating these diseases, the fact that
people
 in poor
countries
 are unable to pay for these treatments has created an unacceptable degree of inequality in global access to health care. I would argue that drug
companies
 have a responsibility to be more ethical and to address
this
 inequality by offering cheaper generic versions of their medicines in
countries
 that cannot afford to pay the full price.
This
 has recently been implemented with the treatment of HIV and AIDS in some African
countries
, saving the lives of millions of
people
.
However
, I
also
 believe that there are others who have a role to play in giving poor
people
 access to drugs.
For example
, rich
people
 could be encouraged to donate to charities to help developing
countries
. An example of
this
 was seen recently when Bill Gates spent vast sums of money to set up immunisation projects in Africa.
In addition
 to wealthy individuals, governments could
also
 donate aid and medical supplies. In
conclusion
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 I would argue that it is immoral for
people
 to be dying
as a result
 of inequality. The value of human life should be universal and it should be the responsibility of the richer
companies
, individuals and governments to ensure that access
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pharmaceuticals
  • Generic drugs
  • Patent laws
  • Healthcare disparity
  • Subsidies
  • Non-Governmental Organizations (NGOs)
  • Intellectual property
  • Epidemiology
  • Affordability
  • Global health initiatives
  • Corporate social responsibility
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