We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used for in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious on their benefits?

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Technology has expanded on a large scale, it is being used in almost every like hospitality, investigation department, health centres, in trading and much more. The dependency on processor's have both pros and cons which are discussed in an upcoming paragraph. There is no denying the fact that gadgets have become part and parcel of life, they have made our task more convenient.

Firstly

, it has reduced workload of maintaining record; before the invention of computer documents were maintained manually and were stored in safe place which was a task of responsibility, but now laptops are introduced and they have reduced the pressure of task, it has become easy to keep notes and if one has to search any previous recorded papers that can be easily searched by one click.

Secondly

, with the help of applied science many new machines are being invented,

for example

"Robots"; these automations are very productive, thought many countries are planning to make clones which can be used at border

instead

of soldiers so during wars a nation will not lose fighters. On the flip side, there are some demerits as well. Humans have become slaves of machinery.

For instance

, modern school education is screen based so students have no opportunity to learn even basic multiplication and addition, which is affecting their mental growth.

In addition

, youth spends maximum time on tablets by surfing, watching web series, Et Cetra.

Instead

of going out and playing outdoor games,

this

addiction of gadgets is making them couch potatoes due to that they are suffering from many health diseases

such

as heart problems, breathing problems and many more. To wrap it up, technology has both positive and negative impacts on society anyhow merits overweight demerits. Screens are very useful gadgets if used in limit as they make

job

Suggestion

the job

more convenient.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used for in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious on their benefits?

Include an introduction and conclusion

More and more people are using computers and electric devices to access information, so there is no need for printed books, magazines and newspaper. To what extent do you agree or disagree

'It is often argued that children must be protected from unsuitable material on TV and the Internet by government censorship. Others say that this is the parents' responsibility to control what their children do and watch. To what extent do you think that this is true?

In the future, people may no longer be able to pay things in shops using cash. All payments may have to be made by card or using phone. Do you think this will happen one day? Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash?

All the people in a company should be treated equally and provided with the same numbers of vacations in a year.To what extent do you agree or disagree?