You are about to go on vacation for a month. A friend from another town will come and stay in your apartment. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: explain where your friend can get the key to the apartment give your friend some instruction about using your apartment recommend some places to go

Dear John, It's been a
while
since I
last
met with you. Hope everything went well recently. It's exciting that you are going to come to Toronto
this
month, though unfortunately, I cannot make it to stay with you. I am going to Vancouver for business next week, so I am writing with some details and tips you might use
while
I am away. First is the key. Upon your arrival on August 8th night, you can go straight to my department, unit 3209. My mother will wait for you in the room and open the door for you,
then
she will pass the key to the unit and a fob for the lobby entrance to you for your convenience during
the
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stay. What's more, I have already turned the air conditioner and hot water on, so that you
would
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not need to change it in the next few days.
However
, if you need
further
help or emergencies come, you can call the number I wrote down on the whiteboard in the kitchen, which is the building management office's number. They will be online every day from 9 am to 5 pm.
Moreover
, always feel free to use anything in the room! Make yourself as comfortable as at your own home. All the bed sheets and towels I have already changed into new ones. If you still need some groceries or necessary things, there is a convenient store which opens 24 hours just a block away, at the intersection of Bay Street and Bloor Street.
Last
but not least, hope you have a good experience in Toronto! If I can end my trip earlier, I will definitely take you to visit the nearby museums and shops. See you
then
. Best regards, Emily
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Consider breaking some of the longer sentences into two for easier readability.
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Incorporate a bit more detail about the specific places to visit in Toronto for a richer response.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are friendly and appropriate.
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The letter maintains a warm and suitable tone throughout.
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The instructions about acquiring the key and using the apartment are clear and detailed.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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