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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

#internet #books #air #tickets #groceries
In Today’s era, Where thing is just a click away. All the required material we can get it without even stepping out of the house and even get it delivered. In following paragraphs, I shall be discussing the pros and cons of the online shopping.
To begin
 with, buying material from particular website has made one’s life easier and convenient. We save
lot
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a lot
lots
 of time of going outside and purchasing. We save the fuel, as we do not travel. It is very
simply
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simple
 to select the items, keep adding them in the basket, and while we check out or select the option
of
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to
 buy now, we can again recheck, whether we required the product or no.
for
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For
 instance, if we go in a mall to buy some grocery, We keep locating the place for the particular thing, We have many
option
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options
 to choose. Comparing is easier, whereas in particle comparison is difficult. On
other hand
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the other hand
, Shopping in person, can give
human touch
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a human touch
the human touch
 as we can see by ourselves and check the quality and the quantity. There are many reported cases of online robbery. As when we use our banking credential while we shop online, it can save the user
ide
(psychoanalysis) primitive instincts and energies underlying all psychic activity
ids
 and passwords, which can
led
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lead
 to robbery. Online purchasing is faster and easier but not all the people can actually use
this
 feature.
For example
, Working people refer online as it makes their lives very simply and they cannot afford to log themselves after work. On the other side orthodox people
tends
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tend
 to go himself or herself and get the stuff. As it gives them
sense
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a sense
 of satisfaction. To conclude, as there
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are
 two
side
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sides
 of
coins
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the coins
. It same concepts applies for the online shopping. It depends on
people
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peoples
person's
 priorities.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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