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Despite the best affords of crime fighting organizations 0417, crime will never be eradicated from civil society. To what extend do u agree ?

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In these days, misconduct has become more evident worldwide phenomenon. In big cities, the infraction is increasing extremely rapidly. Some people think that the best affords of transgression fighting organizations went in vain and lawlessness will never be demolished from the society. I completely agree with above point of view and I will explain in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with,
firstly
, the poverty is emerging day by day. Due to
this
, the underprivileged do not have more money. So that they do not fulfil the demands of their children and poor people join the criminal activities for earning money with the help of wrongdoing which affects their children badly. Due to
this
, the poor people are becoming habitual to do these works for fulfilling the demands in their life.
Secondly
, not only does the poverty force the people to do worse activities, but
also
 the unemployment a major problem in their life. In rural areas, the government does not provide the best education because they do not have good skilled teachers. As a consequence, they jeopardize the future of child life.
For example
, recently a survey revealed that in India government enacted strict rules, but 80% people did not follow
this
 rule and people broke the rules. To conclude, lawlessness fighting organizations provide new rules to evil eradicated from society. The essay discussed, there are many problems in India due to violation do not demolish: poverty and unemployment. If the government provides funds to the poor people so that they do not join bad activities.
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