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You and some friends ate a meal at a restaurant to celebrate a special occasion and you were very pleased with the food and service. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter: * give details of your visit to the restaurant * explain the reason for the celebration * say what was good about the food and service

#friends #restaurant #occasion #food #service #manager #visit #reason #celebration
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter regarding the excellent experience me and my friends had at your restaurant.
Last
 Saturday, we went to the Tako Sushi Restaurant to celebrate a special day in my life. We had never been there before, so we decided to order everything on the menu because every dish seemed delicious.
In addition
, we were sitting at a table by the river-side view which was perfect. The main motif why we were celebrating there was because I got a job position at a very recognizable publisher in Canada.
Moreover
, being a botanic illustrator has always been my dream job since childhood as the Flora subject has always fascinated me. What made our experience remarkable were the delicious type of sushi we ordered and how fresh every ingredient was.
Furthermore
, the customer service was effective and we
also
 enjoyed the comfortable furniture and the pleasant atmosphere in general. We appreciate the service you gave to us and we cannot wait to go eat at your restaurant again. Yours faithfully, Amanda Lago
Submitted by amandacflago23 on

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coherence cohesion
Great job on maintaining a clear and logical structure throughout the letter with smooth transitions between paragraphs.
task achievement
You've effectively used a suitable writing tone for the letter context, which was formal and appropriately conveyed gratitude and satisfaction.
task achievement
To further improve, consider adding more specific details about the food and service that stood out to you, as this would enhance the task achievement score.
coherence cohesion
Ensure variety in sentence structures to make the writing even more engaging.
task achievement
Effective use of a formal tone suitable for writing to the restaurant manager.
task achievement
Excellent job in clearly stating the purpose of the visit and the reason for celebration.
coherence cohesion
Well-organized letter with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, which enhances the reader's understanding.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • outstanding
  • exquisite
  • impeccable
  • flawless
  • attentive
  • accommodating
  • courteous
  • prompt
  • delicious
  • mouthwatering
  • satisfying
  • memorable
  • thank
  • impressed
  • appreciate
  • grateful
  • recommend
  • celebration
  • occasional
  • special
  • occasion
  • stellar
  • exceptional
  • commend
  • commendable
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