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student should pay the full og cost of their own university studies rathet than having free education provided by the state

#student #og #cost #university #studies #rathet #education
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In the contemporary era in
educationeducation is
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education is
education education is
 essential for everyone who live in society. I reckon that after secondary school pupil should required tertiary
education
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.
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however
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However
,
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,
most of the students should not enrol for
further
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education
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 due to financial problem.Some people opine that student should bear the cost of university
instead
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 fund of the state.I disagree with
this
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 notation.
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first
preceding all others in time or space or degree
First
 and foremost
,
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,
the fees of university should be higher and other expenses
such
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 as Hostal fees
,
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,
rent of Accommodation
,
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,
stationary items, etc.Which can't be paid by those students who belong to lower strata families and
thus
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 they should not to do
further
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 study.
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moreover
in addition
Moreover
, they should degrade their confidence and
also
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 discrimination should be happening.Some students started work after secondary training
.
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.
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further
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Further
 more tertiary
education
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has
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will have
plethora
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the plethora
 advantageous by using
this
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 students got jobs in the future
,
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,
and living standard higher they handle problems within effective manners as compared to other because student learnt lot of things
such
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 as professional skills during university and college level so
this
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 is tangible plus point for us
.
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 Summing up
,
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,
the government should provide for free
education
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 to outstanding students rather
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then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 all over the world and
also
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 set up a stringent plan for lower strata
.
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