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Some people think that government funding should not be used for supporting Art & culture, while others think that supporting cultural activities may be beneficial for the population and the culture. Discuss both views and give your own openion.

#people #government #art #culture #activities #population #openion
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Different people having different opinions as few of them are opposing
government
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 fund for Art and
culture
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, where some people believe the
development
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 of population and
culture
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. There are both positive and negative impacts are observed in
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 funding for the Arts and cultures.
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, the
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 funding for cultural
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 unable to accounted as they are immeasurable benefits.
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, there is some possibility of misuse of funds by the local leaders. Even the end user, who originally to be benefitted remains looser as the recognisance shall not be happen due to some political impedance.
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 the essential commodities like transportation and other public services budget get down because the funds being diverted to the
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culture
Suggestion
cultural
 activities. Nowadays, almost in all the developing countries in the world reluctant to divert their funds towards art and
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 improvement as it has not shown any economic growth to them.
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, encouragement of the social arts is making the people on the same page.
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 results unity of people and skills
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 as well.
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 the developed countries, which having sufficient amounts to infrastructure developments can encourage. Despite of
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 of the country,
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the government
 should take initiations to improve the internal arts of people.
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 definitely improves population analytical thinking and sharp catching skills.
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, many countries in
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 regard taking initiation and getting beautiful results. By concluding, The craft arts which are adopted from their
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 to be funded undoubtedly. Since, the improvement of the arts gives fruitful results along with time. In my prospective, all the countries have to look in the direction of increasing the skill sets, which indirectly helps the economic growth of the country.
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, need to take appropriate actions to get utilised
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 funds properly for the allocated works.
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