Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement.
To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

These days people around the world are suffering from many different pollutions and many governments are putting much effort and time to solve these problems. Especially most of the government
think
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thinks
recycling problem
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the recycling problem
as the most dangerous pollution. While I would agree that laws for recycling can be an efficient way to make people recycle, I think the governments should put effort and time to protect our environment in another way. On the one hand, there are not many people who think that recycling is important to save the earth and
this
is why I think appropriate fine and
punishment
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the punishment
will be
perfect solution
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the perfect solution
a perfect solution
to
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for
these people.
For instance
, South Korea has a law to regulate people who do not recycle, so most of the citizens recycle their trash every day.
However
, countries which do not have a rule yet for recycling
such
as India and Philippines are suffering from pollution.
Thus
, if these countries make people pay a bunch of fine when they throw trash without recycling, environmental pollution will be
solve
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solved
in the near future.
On the other hand
, the politicians should consider more efficient solution, not giving people financial punishment,
for example
, teaching advantages of recycling in schools and city councils to students and citizens, Most of the schools which are in our country have a course to teach the importance of recycling and there are
few classes
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a few classes
which any people who live in
same city
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the same city
can take as well.
Moreover education
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Moreover, education
would be
fundamental solution
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the fundamental solution
a fundamental solution
to make people recycle.
Thus government
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Thus, government
should put financial support to experts to make
more effective teaching method
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a more effective teaching method
in order to educate people. In conclusion, I think if the government should pay attention on both financial punishment and education method equally,
then
it is easier to solve our
enviornmental
of or relating to the external conditions or surroundings
environmental
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Waste management
  • Recycling
  • Sustainability
  • Mandatory
  • Voluntary
  • Legislative measures
  • Environmental impact
  • Public awareness
  • Regulation
  • Sanctions
  • Compliance
  • Recycling facilities
  • Consumer behavior
  • Waste reduction
  • Resource conservation
  • Circular economy
  • Eco-friendly
  • Biodegradable
  • Landfill
  • Global initiative
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