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The table below shows key data on the demographics of four different countries.

The table below shows key data on the demographics of four different countries.
The table compares four different countries in terms of population,
GDP
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 per capita and average life expectancy.
Overall
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, the most populous nation is
China
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, but
this
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 country has the lowest
GDP
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 per person,
while
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 the US has the highest economic output per capita, but the lowest life expectancy. As can be seen from the table,
China
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 has a total population of over 1.3 billion, followed by the US with the figure being significantly lower, at nearly 319 million. The population in the UK is the lowest, at only around 65 million, half the figure of Russia. In terms of
GDP
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 per capita, the US has the largest number, at nearly $54,000,
while
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 the lowest figure is recorded in
China
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, just about $6,800.
GDP
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 per person in the UK is approximately $41,800, almost double that of Russia.
According to
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 the table,
life
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the life
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 expectancy, on average, of people in the UK is highest, at 81.5 years,
while
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 that of Americans is lowest only 69.2 years. The figures for
China
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 and Russia are 75.2 and 72.3 years respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gdp, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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