the two maps below show an island before and after construction of some tourist facilities.

the two maps below show an island before and after construction of some tourist facilities.
The bar chart demonstrates the proportions of Catholic residents in six various countries over a 3-year
period
(2010-2013).
Overall
, it is apparent that the levels of Catholic dwellers in China, India and Japan underwent an upward trend,
while
those in the Philippines, Vietnam and Korea experienced
falling
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pattern within three years. The Philippines had the highest rates of
Catholics
, with Japan, having the lowest number of
Catholics
throughout
this
period
. As for the countries with the highest proportions of
Catholics
, the figure in the Philippines, which stood at roughly 76 million in 2010 decreased slightly
at
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72
m
in 2013.
In contrast
, India had a dramatic increase from 10,5
m
to 19
m
till the end of the
period
.
Likewise
, the levels of Catholic residents in China were 9
m
in
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the beginning of the
period
before rising moderately from 6
m
in 2013. With regards to the lowest rates of
Catholics
, those in Vietnam and Japan were more or less the same from 2010 to 2013 (around 5,5
m
and 500,000, respectively). The number of
Catholics
is
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residing in Korea, which was 5,3
m
in 2010 had a slight decline
at
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1,3
m
at the end
of the
period
.
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  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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