More and more young people are interested in finding out about their family background and history. What are the possible reasons? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

These days, the study of the family's historical
background
has become more and more popular among the youth. While the main leading factor of
this
trend can be traced back to their desire for
family reunion
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family reunions
a family reunion
; I believe the phenomenon can lead to some negative impacts as it can lead to
bad influence
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the bad influence
bad influences
on their choice of career. It is a proven fact that most young people spend time looking for their family
background
and
history
because of their desire to reunite with their lost family members. Due to wars or historical changes in the past, many people got lost from their family or relatives, and
the young
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younger
the younger
generation, with the help of science and technology, will follow the
elder
advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
older
generations to find their lost relationships by searching for family
history
. The reality in Vietnam is a good example of that; due to historical changes in 1975 in the South of Vietnam, many people had left their Motherland behind to find new life in other countries. Time went by, and their children now - as young oversea Vietnamese, are trying to find their origin and relatives in Vietnam for the purpose of family regathering. Despite the meaningful goals of the trend, I believe there are many negative impacts when young people trying to study their family
history
; particularly because it will badly affect their selection of future jobs. When finding out about their family in the past, they will either be under a huge pressure for the responsibility to follow their family’s success or be prevented from their ambition due to
the dark
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the darker
points in their family
history
. Take my friend as an example; he had had a dream to become a police officer since he was a child. It was not until he started his study about their family’s
history
did he
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did, he
found that his grandfather was a gangster. The dark point in the family’s
background
had put an end to his ambition because he could not meet current regulations and qualifications of the job. All in all,
although
I understand that the main aim of family
background
studying is for family regathering, I believe
this
phenomenon will bring lots of bad effects, mostly due to its negative impacts on the youth’s job choices.
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