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Nowadays online shopping is extremely popular. Discuss the impact of it on the environment and on people who lost their jobs because of it.

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It is true that the shopping online has outweighed the traditional way of purchasing things in today's complex society.
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, it keeps trending, it has the adverse effects both on the population and the economy of the countries.
To begin
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 with, his phenomena
directly affects
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directly affect
 the members of society.
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 to say, the passive lifestyle leads to a concerning issue as the obesity. As people prefer the online way of shopping due to its convenience, they are more likely to be lenient about their health. A good example of it might be seen in the rising numbers of obesity in recent years.
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, before the possibility of buying things on the internet, it was an excuse of going out or walking around the shops. Another danger might be
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 the bank accounts. When the customers register in sites with personal card numbers, in
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 respect, there could be peril of being hacked in terms of the low security acts.
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 trend affects the economy of countries as well.
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, the consumers
have been obliged
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has been obliged
 to decrease the prices of things in sales as they face the risk of losing the customers. More specifically, they are not able to sale things for high costs, since there is an ongoing competition which could possibly lead to the fewer buyers. Another pivotal issue is that there is a lower demand for the vendors since the serving has been managed by fewer numbers of them.
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, the popularity of electronic shopping causes the increasing of unemployment, which arises a new problem for the states. In conclusion, the long-term effects of online shopping lead to more perils which might damage the economy of the countries and the population's health.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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