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As more and more people move to cities and as cities expand in size, City life loses its appeal To what extent do you agree or disagree with this

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It is irrefutable that cities are expanding rapidly due to the large
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 of people that are moving towards these areas. Owing to
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 migration, I completely agree with the statement that
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 life is gradually losing its appeal. Each
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 has a threshold of natural resources that it can provide for i
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inhabitants. Unfortunately, as most metropolitan cities have crossed that capacity, it is becoming quite challenging to provide basic amenities,
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 as water, land and fresh air, to all the people.
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 quality of life in
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 areas is degrading at a very fast pace.
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, as almost 10000 people migrate to Mumbai, every month, many slum areas have come into existence to provide shelter to a myriads of people, and
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, around 750 thousand people live in a very small area and
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 place has
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 been the epicentre of many deadly diseases.
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, the whole
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 is getting affected by it. With the rise in the
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 of people in the cities,
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 of vehicles on the road has
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 dramatically increased, and
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, air and noise pollution, traffic congestion and roadway safety have
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 been compromised as the
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 of road accidents have
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 increased.
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, Mumbai local trains are always teeming with people, and everyone gets squashed because each person wants to board a train.
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, local transportation system, within the cities has
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 degraded. If cities would have a limited
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 of immigrants, there would have been less pressure on these systems. In conclusion, I firmly opine that as
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 of people are increasing in a
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, the quality of a
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 life is degrading because basic amenities and local transportation system is being compromised.

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