More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Urban country's lifestyle leads young generation towards obesity as; wealth allows inhabitants to buy whatever they desire. The purchasing power has enormous consequences on children's energy life. With the easy I would discuss causes and effects. Modern life is grabbed by unlimited desires, though, everyone wishes to reach, and for
this
person is busy in earning money. At present era people do not have much time to spend in the kitchen and, prepare healthy and hygienic feed for their loved-ones.
Hence
, they preferred to choose ready-made foodstuff items. Simultaneously, children are more attracted to fast cuisine
such
as pizza, burger and sandwiches which are unhealthy for long-term use.
Thus people
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Thus, people
do not have time but, may have enough money to spend on an expensive unhealthy diet. Unhealthy habits provoke obesity
consequently
children may have less immune power, weak cognitive skills and poor adaptability.
For instance
, in growing age child needs a complete diet plan for healthy growth. Whereas, inorganic foodstuff does not fulfil their body and mental energy need
as a result
strength issue may occur I.e. Many inorganic food companies' products are available in the market, which only fulfil feed desire but not energy need. So weaknesses do not allow our generation to expel and in long-run would not have a healthy society. Aforementioned discussion needs attention to overcome
this
problem. In
this
regard parents need to play their significant role so that we could completely beat
this
issue from the root cause and may give healthy habits to our adolescence. If young blood is healthy, tension would have a strong nation ahead.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • sedentary
  • caloric intake
  • processed foods
  • fast food culture
  • screen time
  • metabolic disorders
  • healthcare expenditure
  • lifestyle diseases
  • preventative strategies
  • nutritional education
  • public health policy
  • body mass index (BMI)
  • emotional well-being
  • stigmatization
  • exercise regimen
  • eating habits
  • junk food
  • socioeconomic factors
  • health literacy
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